Revision Letter

Dana Cursi
Professor Young
April 30, 2015
Revision Letter

              To be successful revision I make sure to go through all of the comments that are given to me. Before I even begin I look through my whole essay to see what was good and bad, to see what needs to be done to get a general idea. When I get the comments I start to look and fix them right away to have more time to look at the changes that need to be done. My second essay in particular I believe is my best revised essay. I took a lot of time making corrections on it and every time I got corrections I made sure to address them all. But besides just addressing the comments I also added more details throughout. That essay made me a better writer because it helped me see how clear I should be in writing and how to integrate quotes better too. For example, in my second essay I talked about Ellen DeGeneres but instead of just saying her name thinking everyone knows her, after corrections I made sure to describe her and what she does, and her importance/connection to my essay. Also, when I begin to make those changes I start with the grammar first and look at the whole essay to see what I need to fix. Then once all the grammar is fixed I move to fixing the content and adding more detail. After this class I learned a lot more about grammar and how to incorporate ideas into my essay and have it flow. Also, I am more aware of what different sentence errors and fragments look like.

            When revising my essay I use now S.E.E.R. (state the main point, example, expand, restate topic sentence), R.E.N.N.S. (reasons, examples, names, numbers, sensory detail). Using those it doesn’t change my essay completely it just adds more specifics and details which in the end help my essay. When I get feedback I am willing to change and to try to create a new approach to better my essay. I am willing to try a new approach because I know that the feedback I get back is to help guide me and make me a better writer. When revising the thing that frustrates me the most is when I struggle with trying to think of how to reword something to get my point across. I could be thinking something in my head but when I write it, it might not sound right and I’m not sure how to get it on paper. When writing I write how I talk so that messes me up because it might not always make sense and be proper grammar. When revising what makes it easier is when I see comments that let me know what I should change. Because I am the writer I don’t see what others might see when reading my essay. So with comments it enables me to see what to change and realize what I need to fix more clearly. Also, it helps to guide me in the right direction with how to fix my essay to earn a higher grade in the end.